Dear Mrs. Mosquera:
Dogs’ rights have been
gaining recognition around the world, however some of these creatures are still
living in vulnerable conditions. That is the reason why we would like to
present some suggestions in order to create dog shelters to improve their quality
of life.
Firstly, we have been
realized that stray dogs don’t present appropriate sanitary conditions and that
cause a great impact in the environment. We would like to implement health care
journeys that are going to contribute with the process of providing a better
lifestyle for them.
Secondly, we all know
the important role that food has in living creatures, however there are stray
dogs that don’t have the opportunity to obtain a source of food. Therefore, we
think that it could be accurate to design “comedogs” that are places where dogs
are able to supply their basic needs.
Finally, it is evident
that more and more dogs are living in streets without any supervision that is
one of the reasons we want to build a dog shelter in which they will be protected
of any type of danger.
To conclude, it is
necessary to say this project will improve stray dog’s conditions emphasizing in
the creation of dog shelters, and of course, you can be the one who helps them
out in their time of need and if your pet ever needs a helping hand, someone
will be there for them.
If you have any
questions, do not hesitate to contact us, I look forward to hearing from you.
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ResponderEliminarPay attention to the punctuation marks and the contractions.
Is COMEDOG your own idea? I have seen something similar in Colombia.
If that is not your idea, you should mention something about it or at least explain what that is about.
How will you protect pets food? How will you superve it? How often will you change it?
Bye
Very good, but do not forget to clarify where do you plan to place those shelters and,
ResponderEliminarhow do you plan to collect the money you need to carry out this project?
It is necessary to present the resources you need to develop this project
You should take into account the punctuation and the contractions.
ResponderEliminarAlso you can be more punctual.
*supervise.
ResponderEliminarVery good girls. I liked this proposal's topic but keep in mind you made some grammar mistakes and it is important for you to remember that this should follow a formal writing, then avoid using contractions.
ResponderEliminarTry to develop a bit more your ideas because they are good but were not well-developed
Very good, but it is necessary to clarify better the definition of dog's shelter, besides what could be the possible impact to implement it?. Pay attention to the punctuation marks.
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